49 thoughts on “Blistered – dVerse Open Link Week 125”
This has an eerie quality to it. And also a sadness…when I read that the spirits are directionless and hearts vacant. Doesn’t sound like a very pleasant state.
A dark poem yet full of truth, or at least one side of it. This is very fine writing. “We broke the world with ingrained hate…” well the whole third stanza is a powerhouse.
Wow, Freya – you’ve hit the jackpot with this one! It says so much about the current state of the world, and of we who live in it, but it doesn’t pull back from placing the blame where it really lies – with us.
My onnly slight reservation is with the word But at the beginning of your fourth line; it isn’t necessary; in fact, it confuses the sense of the thought, at least for me.
This rings so true of the way our world can feel these days… although I think there is still beauty to be found, we just have to work harder to find it.
I think that’s a great perspective (not in actuality, for who would want that kind of responsibility!?). I’d love to have the power to sort it all out…
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This has an eerie quality to it. And also a sadness…when I read that the spirits are directionless and hearts vacant. Doesn’t sound like a very pleasant state.
No, not a pleasant state at all. I pity the inhabitants!
This has to be my favorite poem of you I ever read.. so many things to like,.. the tight form, the darkness… the sharpness… and that last stanza…
Thank you so much, Bjorn. I am delighted!
“We broke the world with ingrained hate” There’s a lot of power in just those 8 words, let alone the rest of the poem
Thank you, Bryan.
Is anything more metaphysically frightening than an empty and silent firmament? A powerful dark piece.
No, I don’t think so. Thank you.
a little spooky, somewhat sad, but very well expressed.
Thank you, Morgan. Yes, full of spectres….
Vacant, shattered hearts – sounds so permanently hopeless…
That was the plan – I’m glad it worked.
whew…def rather apocalyptic…the lone house standing still….the feeling of being a directionless spirit as well…that would not be fun at all….
I think fun comes very low on the list in this world…
This is an eerie write–enjoyed your vision here
Thank you, Audrey.
A sad poem nicely penned.
Thank you, Ayala.
wow….the last two lines…not sad really….just sort of nothingness
And isn’t that nothingness the worst kind of world, in the end? Thank you.
A sad look at an empty house is a real pity. It could have seen better days! Nicely Freya!
Hank
Indeed it could. Thank you.
Losing the light of direction..lost in darkness..hope a flicker of hope remains..
Perhaps… I’m putting my characters through it!
A dark poem yet full of truth, or at least one side of it. This is very fine writing. “We broke the world with ingrained hate…” well the whole third stanza is a powerhouse.
Thank you so much, Ronald.
This gave me chills – fiction or not – you give an insight into the world and where it is going.
Thank you. I hope it isn’t going that way…..
It’s scary and eerily beautiful at the same time. I like these lines-
Morals swept under carpets thick
With justification of mealy mouths
Speaking half-truths, lies, all lies.
They speak to me because humans have always used need as a justification for greed.
Thank you. Unfortunately, we can create so much beauty and joy – and so much destruction and despair….
absolutly True…. I was like reading my mind out……. I am quite like that I guess…. Nice words…..
Ooh, thank you!
Wow, Freya – you’ve hit the jackpot with this one! It says so much about the current state of the world, and of we who live in it, but it doesn’t pull back from placing the blame where it really lies – with us.
My onnly slight reservation is with the word But at the beginning of your fourth line; it isn’t necessary; in fact, it confuses the sense of the thought, at least for me.
Thank you, Tony. I had a revisit of the poem in the cold light of day and agree with your comment on the ‘but’ – so have removed it!
Sadly beautiful
Thank you.
Thank you for sharing 🙂 cheers!
This rings so true of the way our world can feel these days… although I think there is still beauty to be found, we just have to work harder to find it.
A very compelling, eerie read!
Thank you, Kelly. I agree – all hope is not lost, but we do have to work hard to find it.
I don’t feel a powerlessness here. Almost as if we are the destroyer. Or one of the few could clear the world of its broken pieces.
I think that’s a great perspective (not in actuality, for who would want that kind of responsibility!?). I’d love to have the power to sort it all out…
Well this fits a dark and stormy night with the temperatures dropping low so well – well crafted if chilling. A dark write but fine craft shown here.
Thank you, Shanyn.
How dark, displaying no hope. Great read.
Thank you!
Such a sense of sadness. Almost fitting for the dreary day we’re having weather wise where I am.
“We broke the world with ingrained hate” Damn, just damn.
Thank you, Raivenne. I’m not sure if I could write this in the midst of a sparkling summer, I must say.
Doesn’t sound too much like fiction to me. Cool poem.
Maybe not…! Thank you, Sean.