Anonymous – dVerse Meeting the Bar

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Count

the coins

exactly for what

you need to purchase,

don’t look the shopkeeper in

the eye, don’t attract attention, be

polite, hide your cracked and dirty nails,

give your meek thanks and leave as quietly

as you entered. Poverty-stricken you don’t have the

option to demand any more than that. Money talks loudest.

You

learned the

rules the hard

way. You want to

pass them on, ease the

path for those that follow in

your shoes but the arrogance of youth

is bravery that you have long forgotten, it

was a lifetime ago. You watch their smiles fade.

They too will learn the hard way. Money talks loudest.


This week on dVerse Meeting the Bar, the lovely Victoria has introduced the poetry form, the Etheree. This is another form new to me, dating from the late 20th century and introduced by Etheree Taylor Armstrong, a poet from Arkansas. Simple enough (perhaps!), the form is one word (or syllable) for the first line, two words (or syllables) for the second and so on, up to the tenth line. Rinse and repeat, reverse, or stop right there, however the mood takes you. It was so much fun to try and no, I have no idea why I wanted to write on the subject matter I chose.

If you love poetry, whether reading or writing it, do visit dVerse. Put your feet up, sup on a gin and tonic, swig a bottle of beer, chat a while with the barkeep, enjoy yourself…

29 thoughts on “Anonymous – dVerse Meeting the Bar

    1. Thank you, Grace. I did have to play around with my word choice a little to make it look how I wanted! I’m glad it had the desired effect for you in that respect as well 🙂

  1. You can feel the pain of poverty in this well-crafted etheree. And I really like how you built the pyramids, one on top of the other. If I’m not mistaken, I think you are the only one who did that! And thanks for the “lovely”–made my day! :0)

    1. Thank you, Victoria! I did have to choose and re-choose my words to make the form look visually pleasing in that way – it was a most enjoyable aspect of this form, which I hadn’t expected at all. I’m also very pleased that the story ‘worked’. I had no idea how it was going to pan out until the end.
      And you are very welcome 😀

  2. I really like how you capture the emotion of being poverty stricken… I think even those of us that are not poor can recognize the shame, there is always someone richer, there is always that moment of thinking that your money is not good enough…

  3. Powerful poem. I could not help but read the ending as a warning, but also as a defeat. “Money talks loudest”, such a true statement in our century, and such a sad one.

  4. SMiLes noW..
    afTer FiNaLLy
    arriVing aT aLL
    i nEEd i FiNd
    th@ money
    never
    exists
    aT aLL..
    fAst Cars..
    and otHeR
    stuff as shiny..
    thE good stuFF
    LiVes inSiDe noW
    no longer transmuted
    tooL..
    am i..:)

    1. Thank you, Katie. I love how you springboard off other people’s poems and respond with another one in your own unique style. I’d recognise your work anywhere – and love its creativity!

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