Here is this week’s entry into the weekly challenge brought to us by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Here are the rules: Use the photo as inspiration, write a hundred(ish) words – and share! Here goes this week’s – and I welcome your comments again!
The boy tugs his mother’s sleeve, demanding attention.
“Mom! Look at the lady!”
“Hush, Ryan – oh!”
Claire picks up her son, pressing his face into her neck, trying to protect him, yet unable to tear her own gaze away from the horror above.
The woman in the red dress is suspended from the fire escape, arm muscles straining, fingertips loosening, loosening…
The scream resonates, bouncing off buildings.
Claire squeezes her eyes shut, wants to block her ears, holds her little boy closer, closer, waiting for the inevitable thud.
“And… Cut! That’s a wrap! Great job everyone!”
38 thoughts on “Suspended – Friday Fictioneers”
Cool twist! I loved it!
It must be an invisible woman movie too! Felt relieved at the end …
Glad you enjoyed it!
Wonderful twist! What a great ending to a suspenseful story!
Thank you, Jan!
Oh, yes, well done. I almost missed the ending. 🙂 Good job!
I am finally able to sit quietly and read your story! I like the clever ending. I had a feeling you didn’t mean suicide but had no idea what the twist would be.
I’m glad you’ve found time to sit down! Well, you never know with my imagination… but yes, I preferred the less awful ending too.
Great twist! Well done.
Thank you Sandra.
I am so relieved it was a movie!
I’m glad! Life can be horrible enough, can’t it?
Oh great ending!
I agree with everyone else – a good build and a really good way to end.
Didn’t see the ending coming at all. Makes a good story great. (RogRites)
Thank you, RogRites – I’m glad the ending was a surprise for you. That was the plan!
good job! Now, tell me once again,why did the women in the red dress fall out of it? Randy
Thanks, Randy. As for why she fell out of the dress… Well, that’s for your imagination to work out!
Well done! I went: ‘thank heavens!’
Phew… glad it was a film… Loved that
Thank you, Bjorn!
Ambitious idea, loved the twist.
Thank you, I’m glad you liked it.
Oy! I’m glad there wasn’t a thud at the end. Nice twist.
Thank you! And thank you for commenting 🙂
Great little twist at the end. Glad it didn’t end with a real thud.
Thank you, Rochelle!
Thankfully, it is just for a movie:) interesting read
Thank you, nightlake, I’m pleased you found it interesting 🙂
Oh yes, great ending. I was worried where you were going with the story
Thank you! I saved her from an untimely end, just at the last minute…
WHere is that big blue stunt cushion thingie when you need it. I was expecting to hear the thud or splat just like Claire!
Thank you! I do like a sudden twist at the end 🙂