excise the superfluous
distil to the essence
strip away fat
reveal the bones
expose meaning to the light
and then write
Tonight is Open Link Night over at dVerse. No theme, no particular form, just poetry of your own choice. My offering tonight is very short, but that reflects the whole point of the message!
If you hunger for more – more length, more delicacy, more romance, more form, more poetry, head on over to dVerse and enjoy – take part, even!
Sounds simple – but is so hard to do! Well put, though.
It’s not always easy, no! Thank you 🙂
Excellent advice! and then you take your own advice and write!
Thank you!
Oh I do agree… sometimes we have to boil it down to the pause between breaths.
It can be hard sometimes though, can’t it? Thank you, Bjorn.
This is absolutely stunning, Freya ❤ such power even in the brevity of your lines 🙂
Lots of love,
Sanaa
Thank you, as always, Sanaa 🙂
Good advice for all writers. Nicely penned.
Thank you, Linda. I don’t always manage to follow this… 🙂
Do any of us always follow good advice? 😉
Not so much… 😉
I love the simplicity of words as you have expressed here, Freya! Sometimes so much is said in brevity! Love this piece!
Thank you, Walt! 🙂
I think you have achieved your goal Freya with this poem….well done…
Thank you, Michael 🙂
Always read your words Freya, you always have something to say and said so eloquently.
The simpler the better, I say. Good one Freya and thanks for joining us.
Excellent and concise write, Freya! (“distill”)
Thank you, Lynn! Ah – I used the English spelling of distil, rather than American English! 😉
I learned something…thanks! (My inner editor is American, obviously.)
Of course it is – and I did have to check to make sure I hadn’t spelled it incorrectly, so I learned something too! Sidewalk versus pavement is much more clear 😉
Wow! This is fantastic, Freya! Short and simple, but so powerful.
Thank you so much, Josslyn!
You’re welcome! 🙂
Freya! This is so well done! Sometimes, when I feel I have over-written I say I need to ‘Haiku it.’ In other words, strip it to its barest of essential words to convey the meaning at its core. This says it brilliantly 🙂
That’s a perfect description/thought – I think I might borrow it for my own personal use 😉
And thank you so much!
Amen and three cheers!
Your poem is the distilled essence of the wiring process. Nicely created!
Thank you so much, Bryan!