Havana – Five Sentence Fiction

It’s time for my second offering to Lillie McFerrin’s Five Sentence Fiction, a weekly prompt where there is no word limit, just a limit on the number of sentences. Plus, although she provides a word prompt, it is just for direction only – you don’t have to include the word itself in your contribution.

This week, the prompt is FABRIC. And this week, I managed not to use the word itself (result!).

Let me know what you think! And whilst you’re at it, why not take a look at everyone else’s offerings (I’m sure they’ll be fabulous), and even give it a go yourself…


– Havana –

Laila surveyed the packed room, delighted at the brilliantly-clothed, rainbow-hued guests passing gently to and fro, each of them grasping a fizzing champagne flute.

The low murmur floating above their collective heads was punctuated frequently by echoing belly-laughs as small groups shared a joke, their joy bouncing off the walls and raising smiles all around.

“You’ve done a brilliant job, there’s not a sad face here, nor a shred of black,” said her uncle, giving her a reassuring squeeze and a kiss on the cheek. “It’s everything that he would have wanted; a final last hurrah to send him on his way.”

“Chin, chin, Dad,” she whispered, and raised her own glass to the sky where she imagined him to be, smiling down on them all, fat cigar in hand.



19 thoughts on “Havana – Five Sentence Fiction

  1. Very evocative piece! I like the ‘brilliantly-clothed, rainbow-hued guests’, ‘the brilliantly-clothed, rainbow-hued guests’ and the last sentence. Excellent!

  2. I meant:
    Very evocative piece! like the ‘brilliantly-clothed, rainbow-hued guests’, ‘The low murmur floating above their collective heads’ and the last sentence. Excellent!
    Sorry about the mistake. I realised when I got my own comment in my inbox!

  3. This was very well written, darling — you were able to convey atmosphere and enough character development to make the story quite evocative.

  4. Beautiful description and well-structured, suggesting a different sort of party all together. Well done.

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