Here is my latest entry into the weekly challenge brought to us by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
Here are the rules: Use the photo as inspiration, write a hundred(ish) words – and share! Here goes my offering for this week – and I welcome your comments again!
Copyright – Renee Heath
34 thoughts on “Wallow – Friday Fictioneers”
A very interesting take on the photo! Maybe they need her around just a little longer?
Maybe they do, or maybe they need to move on (I think that’s what she thinks!)
I like that twist at the end, but I think she’s nuts!
Many people are, if we use a ‘normal’ bar as comparison! Sometimes, the mind travels strange pathways, which is what happened when writing this! 🙂 Thank you!
I totally get it, Freya. Mourning is for those left behind and even then, there’s a limit to the overt mourning.
Indeed. You cannot put your life on hold forever. Thank you!
Nice twist at the end! I agree with Janet; rituals of mourning are intended to comfort the living.
Yes, indeed they are. Thank you 🙂
What a very valid point.. And what an ordeal for ghosts not having the ability to control the mourners.
A control-freak ghost – maybe that’s why they all come back, because something left in the world of the living really, really needs to be changed….
At first I wasn’t taken with the last line, but then, sadly, it made me think of suicide. Not sure if that’ what you were going for, but… good job!
Not necessarily suicide, but sometimes I think that those who are dying really do just want to be able to let go. Thank you for reading and commenting – much appreciated!
Great twist! Loved it.
Freya, I can understand how distressing that might be for the poor ghost. 😦 Seems they have to accept she’s gone and she has to accept it’s beyond her ability to control them. On the other hand, maybe their actions are meant to help her totally pass over which she doesn’t seem to have done. Well written. 🙂
Lots and lots of ‘perhaps’ in this short story, yes? All I know is she feels very, very frustrated! I would want to be remembered and mourned, but not for life to stop for those left behind, in the process. Thank you!
What a delightful twist at the end. Let the poor girl be gone and get on with living.
Agreed! Thank you 🙂
Good take on the photo prompt. Didn’t pick up on Sophia looking over her own death at first, think I must be a tad slow this evening.
It’s Friday – that’s what they’re for, to be slow! Thank you 🙂
Nice twist in the end. Maybe she needs more practice with her paranormal skills? Then she’ll tell ’em.
I think she might… she needs ghostly L plates, like learner drivers… Thank you!
An interesting take on the prompt. The last line made me go back and read it again, and once I knew she was a ghost, each line took on a new meaning. Great stuff.
I did try to to be subtle 🙂
I loved the POV reveal at the end.
Thank you, Rochelle.
Wow, Freya! This one is truly haunting. 😉 I really liked the subtleties, the fact that you didn’t announce the meaning. It was really well done!
Thank you! I do try not to tell the whole story in too obvious a way. I like my readers to work… 🙂
I hear you! The title was great too. 🙂
Thank you 🙂
Sometimes it’s just hard to let go. Beautiful story.
It is indeed. Thank you.
What a unique perspective! How rare to get a glimpse into death from the deceased’s POV. Very sad, but it was also somewhat comforting, as she had come to accept her death. Wonderful story!
Thank you! I do like to look at events from a different perspective, where I can.