Here is this week’s entry into the weekly challenge brought to us by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
Here are the rules: Use the photo as inspiration, write a hundred(ish) words – and share! Here goes my offering for this week – and I welcome your comments again!
– Traces –
They tear my beloved keyboard to pieces. I try not to mind.
Of course, my mind is taken off them levering it apart when they begin their search on and inside me, convinced that I’m carrying.
Then I remember you stroking the keys, your fingertips lingering on the black and white, finally whispering over my skin. Leaving… traces.
I’m a decoy. You sail through customs, do the switch, hail a taxi, free as a bird.
I’ll be with you soon, once they’ve finished their paperwork. And you’re buying me a new keyboard.
The best, of course.
35 thoughts on “Traces – Friday Fictioneers”
I hope the new keyboard will be a reality. I like your different take, Freya.
Thank you, Janet! I’m not sure she deserves it… do you think she was a willing participant, or not? 🙂
I think she was willing but he’s not going to be at the other end.
Yes. Can you really trust a drug smuggler?! 🙂
Well, I wouldn’t, but then I wouldn’t be smuggling either. 🙂
The character deserves the best for going through that mess.
Thank you, and welcome. Do you think she took part willingly, or not…?!
That was a good one!
Thank you, Glynis!
Great ending 🙂
Thank you 🙂
Vry clever, Freya. Makes me wonder if it’s fiction or memoir–just that unique.
Oh, thank you! Well, it’s not my memoir (thankfully!)….
This is such a good take. 🙂
Good take. 🙂
Thank you 🙂
I wouldn’t hold my breath about seeing him again. Very clever take on the prompt.
Hmmm, me either. Thank you, Sandra 🙂
Of course a new one Freya, nothing but the best of course.
Absolutely, after all that trouble she went through! 🙂
Go to Jail, go directly to Jail. Do not pass GO, do not collect $200.
Clever pair these two. Good scam. Let’s hope he doesn’t double-cross her like Sandra suggests.
Aha – so you picked up that she was a willing participant! Others haven’t been so sure – but I was intentionally a little vague. If it had been the original length (220 words-ish) then it would have been blindingly obvious 🙂
Clever tale, well constructed, happily ambiguous.
Thank you, Mr Elephant!
Love is not only blind but, often, has no common sense. I enjoyed your unique take on the prompt.
Thank you, Rochelle.
This was very good. Loved the title and the protagonists hard bitten personna. Well done.
Thank you, Doug. I like to think that writing in this way removes any hardness or bitterness I might possess myself…. 😉
ah.. I shouldn’t wish the best for her.. drug dealers deserves jail (without keyboards) but cleverness is good too.. (hope they were smuggling teddy bears)
Oh the dilemma…! 🙂
this was so exciting. like a scene from a movie. and i agree with Björn but since this is fiction, well.. i think i’m gonna keep rooting for her ^^
A movie scene – what a great thought! Hopefully he’s bought her a new keyboard by now… 🙂
I always look forward to your stories, Freya. This was an entirely different direction from all the other stories I’ve read. Well paced and full of punch. Nicely done!
Thank you! I do like to be different – in many ways! 🙂