Here is this week’s entry into the weekly challenge brought to us by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
Here are the rules: Use the photo as inspiration, write a hundred(ish) words – and share! Here goes my offering for this week – and I welcome your comments again!
Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
– Traces –
They tear my beloved keyboard to pieces. I try not to mind.
Of course, my mind is taken off them levering it apart when they begin their search on and inside me, convinced that I’m carrying.
Then I remember you stroking the keys, your fingertips lingering on the black and white, finally whispering over my skin. Leaving… traces.
I’m a decoy. You sail through customs, do the switch, hail a taxi, free as a bird.
I’ll be with you soon, once they’ve finished their paperwork. And you’re buying me a new keyboard.
The best, of course.
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I hope the new keyboard will be a reality. I like your different take, Freya.
janet
Thank you, Janet! I’m not sure she deserves it… do you think she was a willing participant, or not? 🙂
I think she was willing but he’s not going to be at the other end.
Yes. Can you really trust a drug smuggler?! 🙂
Well, I wouldn’t, but then I wouldn’t be smuggling either. 🙂
The character deserves the best for going through that mess.
Thank you, and welcome. Do you think she took part willingly, or not…?!
That was a good one!
Thank you, Glynis!
Great ending 🙂
Thank you 🙂
Vry clever, Freya. Makes me wonder if it’s fiction or memoir–just that unique.
Oh, thank you! Well, it’s not my memoir (thankfully!)….
This is such a good take. 🙂
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Good take. 🙂
Thank you 🙂
I wouldn’t hold my breath about seeing him again. Very clever take on the prompt.
Hmmm, me either. Thank you, Sandra 🙂
Of course a new one Freya, nothing but the best of course.
Absolutely, after all that trouble she went through! 🙂
Go to Jail, go directly to Jail. Do not pass GO, do not collect $200.
Clever pair these two. Good scam. Let’s hope he doesn’t double-cross her like Sandra suggests.
Aha – so you picked up that she was a willing participant! Others haven’t been so sure – but I was intentionally a little vague. If it had been the original length (220 words-ish) then it would have been blindingly obvious 🙂
Clever tale, well constructed, happily ambiguous.
Well done.
Thank you, Mr Elephant!
Dear Freya,
Love is not only blind but, often, has no common sense. I enjoyed your unique take on the prompt.
shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle.
Dear Freya,
This was very good. Loved the title and the protagonists hard bitten personna. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you, Doug. I like to think that writing in this way removes any hardness or bitterness I might possess myself…. 😉
ah.. I shouldn’t wish the best for her.. drug dealers deserves jail (without keyboards) but cleverness is good too.. (hope they were smuggling teddy bears)
Oh the dilemma…! 🙂
this was so exciting. like a scene from a movie. and i agree with Björn but since this is fiction, well.. i think i’m gonna keep rooting for her ^^
A movie scene – what a great thought! Hopefully he’s bought her a new keyboard by now… 🙂
I always look forward to your stories, Freya. This was an entirely different direction from all the other stories I’ve read. Well paced and full of punch. Nicely done!
Thank you! I do like to be different – in many ways! 🙂