Bassline – dVerse

You speak like the words are tripping over your tongue, boy, like your brain’s runnin’ too fast to share all your street joy, your mental agility, your linguistic ability- – – – – it silences me. I cannot compete, you’ve been doin’ it for years, listenin’ to those MCs, they’re controllin’ like masters, freestylin’ with fluidity, there ain’t no rigidity, shoutin’ over ghetto blasters – – – – – you’re a tough act to come after. So I ain’t rhymin’, or reasonin’, or trying to emulate, you win hands down, boy. I dig it.

Watching drum and bass MCs spit words like broken teeth sends me crazy.

 

Bassline

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This week, on dVerse Meeting the Bar, Bjorn is our benevolent bartender and he has cordially invited us to indulge in haibun (prose, followed by haiku), but he also invites us to test and distort the tradition. I think that I have broken all the rules, apart from using 17 syllables in the closing line, which is in the style of an American Sentence – because I love, love, love Allen Ginsberg, I couldn’t resist. And, because I spent some time last night watching a drum & bass DJ and MC on an internet radio station, I threw rhyme and rhythm into my (not quite) prose section.

Poetry is all about breaking the rules, right? I hope you enjoy it 🙂

Please pop over to dVerse to see how others have risen to this challenge.

 

 

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36 thoughts on “Bassline – dVerse

  1. lol…there are some that are definitely skilled on the mic…
    and the way they bend words freestyling…i have to admit i need a bit more structure
    notes at least, otherwise i get lost in my own words….

    they are amazing to watch though…

  2. Damn right, true poetry is a muckraker, not a sycophant; which complicates things for many of us trying to follow the parameters of the MTB prompts. Loved the energy, the verve in this piece; make me flash on my own offering on Tuesday, BANGING WITH THE BITCHES, & yes, howling with Ginsberg, Tupac, Snoop Dog, & running with our tongues out with the dVerse dogs.

    1. Yes, I quite like mastering a poetry form and have enjoyed writing villanelles and sestinas, and so on, but I find the beat style utterly freeing – it really allows me to get my feelings out there with a whole load of impact. Banging With the Bitches was great, Glenn – and all the best dogs run with their tongues out… 🙂

  3. I like the rhythm of your poem, Freya. They may be a tough act to follow, but I think you have followed well. I ‘dig it.’ Smiles!

  4. it’s awesome when beat and words are just flowing and the whole person IS poetry.. i could listen to them for hours – and i wish i could spit poetry like that… great rhythm to your piece as well freya

  5. Made me laugh, and cry when I think of cycling commentators, clipping their words or drawling in semi-foreign tongues. Life needs a ‘sound-off’ button too.

  6. Freya, great to see you here. I’m dipping a toe in for the first time but along very different lines that yours. I greatly enjoyed your take and it felt very real to me, a dip back into the 60’s, a time I remember. 🙂 I have a feeling that in poetry styles, rules are often made and then stretched or sometimes willfully twisted and broken, forming new shapes and styles. I doubt any haibun police will be on your tail.

    janet

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