Unreachable – Friday Fictioneers

Here is this week’s entry into the weekly challenge brought to us by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Here are the rules: Use the photo as inspiration, write a hundred(ish) words – and share! Here goes my offering for this week – and I welcome your comments again!

Copyright - David Stewart

Copyright – David Stewart

– Unreachable –

I can’t reach you any more. You’re distant, your eyes aren’t with me. You look the same, but you’re no longer you.

I think about when we were small, and the world seemed so big. Even though it was just our back yard, the brambles and creepers were our jungle, our wilderness, our desert, our uncharted territories. We were mercenaries, vagabonds and pirates. We climbed the mainsail to the crow’s nest, shouted out ‘Land Ahoy!’ and hoisted a Jolly Roger high, so achingly, heart-stoppingly high, from the old oak tree above our heads.

I can’t reach you now. You just see a ladder, where I still see adventure. You’ve let the world crush you.

You’re gone.


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34 thoughts on “Unreachable – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Dear Freya,

    If there were “love” icon I would click it. Your story is both heart wrenching and breath-taking. To say much more would just detract from the beauty of it.



  2. The former complicity feels true-to-life and reminds me of my own childhood and the games with my brothers and the neighbour’s son while the present contrast between the two characters is quite painful and sad. Lovely entry!

    1. I’m glad you enjoyed it. I was an only child until I was not quite 13, so this is really and truly my imagination at work in that aspect. Or maybe it’s my child self talking to me now…

  3. “You just see a ladder where I still see adventure.” – this was powerful, darling. Well done, and an excellent diversion from literal interpretation.

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