This week, the Trifecta team have taken pity on us, after last week’s prescriptive challenge. This time round, just 33 words, on any theme we like. Ah, freedom (of sorts)!
I hope you enjoy my offering – please visit here to read many more!
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– Ghost –
This is where my heart splintered.
There – is where healing began.
When I thought I saw you – distance fracturing my certainty –
I understood my wishful thinking.
And the tear rent wide.
Once more.
Freya Writes... 
This is sad but great. I love the distance line.
Thank you, Draug. The distance line started out very differently last night!
I like that the healing began in the splintering! Very nice poem indeed! 😀
Thank you, Linda. I’m a bit wary of poetry (writing, not reading), so I thought 33 words was just enough to dip my toe in, this time around. I’m glad you liked it.
I did and I think you should write more!
Oooh, perhaps I will! Thank you for the encouragement.
A poignant and moving poem.Healing is a long and, sometimes, painful process.
Thank you, Gabriella. Yes, long and painful – a very hard combination to cope with.
Ouch. This one hit home. So powerful.
Thank you kallanannie, I’m glad it achieved what I had hoped for…
lovely – sometimes we see someone who looks so much like our loved one . . . that the loss is felt again – and again – and again. You captured that well.
Thank you, Barbara. It is hard when that happens, but perhaps it might also be a comfort.
Apart from anything else, I admire you for taking up these challenges. They take a lot of work and commitment. But never mind all that. Your words are lovely, and that is what made me comment.
” distance fracturing my certainty ”
That’s a keeper on its own
Thank you, countingducks. These challenges keep me writing, without having to find my own inspiration, whilst I’m beavering away on something else behind the scenes. I’m really pleased that you enjoyed this offering.
Really cool word choice here. I love all of the tearing. Thanks for linking up.
Thank you for the inspiration, and I’m glad you loved it 🙂
Very poignant and beautifully written. I could feel her heart splinter.
Thank you, Lumdog, much appreciated.
Beautifully written
Thank you, Bjorn – I’m pleased you enjoyed it.
Lovely poem, filled with emotional blends.
Thank you, Lorri.
Great opening line, and the rest did not disappoint! Gorgeous poem.
I’m pleased you thought that it didn’t peak too soon – thank you, Christine.
the words you chose to convey that hurt, that splintering of a heart were beautiful and pitch perfect. I felt my own heart ache with the tearing.
Kir – thank you so much for your lovely compliments.
Oh, the wishful thinking we’re not even aware of, and all the damage it does.
Nice poem.
I think we all do this wishful thinking – life hurts more as a consequence.