Reap – Trifextra Week 80

This weekend, the Trifecta team’s Trifextra challenge asks us to write only 33 words, including the word ‘tooth’, but excluding stories of milk-teeth tooth loss. 

Here’s my offering this week. It’s weird, came out of nowhere and I’m not sure what to make of it – are you? Let me know!

And… why not visit here to read all the other brilliant offerings?! Or, take part yourself….

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– Reap –

I created a monster out of you.

 I moulded you to my desires.

 I wished. Here you are.

 Like the jagged tooth of a cheap comb, you cut me.

 And

Made

Me

Bleed.

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28 thoughts on “Reap – Trifextra Week 80

  1. It comes out fine! I have the feeling the ‘monster’ has rebelled and now the tables have been turned. In a way it made me think of Frankenstein. But a more contemporary and more credible version.
    There also seems to be a feeling of sadness and regret, of things that might have been different – if only. And not only because ‘you’ bleed.

    1. Yes, it is a bit Frankenstein’s monster isn’t it?! I love that novel, it’s so very sad. Sadness, regret.. Yes, I can see that too, I truly didn’t think this through beforehand – it just arrived.

  2. I want to punch him for you.
    every word was good, right, well placed and packed the punch so that by the time you get to “made me bleed” your own skin is red and on fire with hurt.

    WOW.

    1. Now that’s such an interesting -not to mention unexpected – reaction! Yes, I see what you mean. I had to go back and re-read my offering to see how you came to that conclusion! Well done on making me revisit my thoughts! 🙂

      1. It’s the great miracle of language that others see in our words ideas we haven’t considered. I have to do the same thing sometimes when I read the comments of others. Exciting eh?

      2. It is indeed! And I’m sure that it helps us each develop as both writers, and readers. Your thoughts and comments are, as always, very much appreciated! 🙂

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