This weekend, the Trifecta team’s Trifextra challenge asks us to take a trip back in time to our school days, and write a haiku, on any subject.
I’ve spent this week in the fabulous countryside of Ceredigion (mid-Wales), and have been inspired. This afternoon, we watched red kites descend on the lake at Bwlch Nant Yr Arian, which is a nature reserve managed by the Forestry Commission and the RSPB (a charity dedicated to the care and conservation of bird life in the UK).
Anyway, here is my haiku – I do enjoy trying to convey feelings, thoughts and ideas in such a limited number of syllables (5-7-5).
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38 thoughts on “Hide and Seek – Trifextra Week 83”
You have been on a writing spree, all for our benefits! I wonder what your mouse knows!
Your trip to Wales will afford you many writing moments. Beautifully done Freya.
Thank you! Yes, I’m sure it will weave its way through future fiction 🙂
I like how you notice everything from the sky to the ground. Pretty 🙂
Thank you, JannaT. 🙂
So much going on in such a tiny poem. Well done!
P.S. I’d really like to know what the mouse is hiding. 🙂
Thank you Ivy. As for the mouse.,. I’ve been sworn to secrecy!
Ah. that litlle mouse.. great idea for a haiku.
Thank you, Bjorn 🙂
Nice images and great last line. If you haven’t found her already check out @lordfanny1723 on Twitter. She lives in Wales. One of the best 5-7-5 haiku writers out there.
Thank you, Steph – and thanks for pointing me in the direction of lordfanny!
Does the mouse not hide from the possibilities of being eaten by the bird? The secret must be how delicious he tastes! And I thought it was difficult making a story out of 33 words…your thirteen made for a very visually and beautiful work!
For a tiny animal, the mouse could hold many secrets! I’m very pleased you enjoyed my haiku story 🙂
Oh, this is so lovely! Wonderfully done!
Thank you, Suzanne, I’m glad you enjoyed it!
What a beautiful moment you’ve created. Thanks for linking up!
Thank you, Trifecta people!
mouse hides, small secret – very unique!
Thank you 🙂
I really, really like haiku with ‘distance’ in it, really do. Distance also gives the polar opposites so strong in a haiku. You reached that here, so well – as you know you have! Focusing into the small secret – very nice indeed.
Oh, thank you! I just imagined myself looking down on the red kites, looking down on the mouse. And as I was using my camera quite a bit, I zoomed in on the action metaphorically as well. I’m glad you enjoyed it so much 🙂
Love the idea of a little mouse and a secret. Really well done.
love it! Although I’m a huge fan of hawks, falcons, and other birds of prey…this time I’m cheering for the mouse!
Thank you, Bryan. Yes, the mouse gets my vote – although the red kites (and the lone white kite) were absolutely beautiful.
Your haiku conjures up so many wonderful images and places…which it is meant to do. Love the last line because I adore little anything animals…just not by surprise.
Thank you, Maggie 🙂
Yes, as long as they aren’t a surprise (like sitting on your chest when you wake up in the morning…), then little creatures are lovely.
Love that last line and the idea that the mouth both has a small secret and is a small secret.
Thank you – I’m glad you enjoyed it!
I love this postage stamp sized moment of the natural world! Excellent!
Thank you 🙂
Gorgeous! I love the ‘zooming down’ flow.
Thank you! 🙂
Great haiku! I adore the small secret.
Thank you, Kymm 🙂
I like the layers of the haiku, from top to middle to bottom, reflected by the subjects of each line!
Thank you, Sandra. I’m glad you liked the layers!