Here is this week’s entry into the weekly challenge brought to us by the lovely Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
Here are the rules: Use the photo as inspiration, write a hundred(ish) words – and share! Here goes my offering for this week – and I welcome your comments again!
Copyright – Bjorn Rudberg
– Consequences –
Iwata-san stood on his veranda, gazing towards the horizon. Such a beautiful sight was lost on the young man. He was consumed with anger.
All he could see was the ramshackle tin and timber building behind him. Even with his back turned to the monstrosity – as he called it in meetings with his lawyer – it was there, overshadowing everything.
He cursed his father for having a mistress. For dying and leaving a will. For stipulating that his son could inherit all his land as long as Shimuzu-san could remain in her hut until her dying day.
Which would have been just about acceptable, if she hadn’t been younger than Iwata-san himself…
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34 thoughts on “Consequences – Friday Fictioneers”
Great story. I can understand Iwata-san’s rage.
Especially as his father is not there to shout at! Thank you, Bryan.
He’ll certainly die before her if he doesn’t let go of all that rage. He seems a bit too materialistic for his own good. It’s just a house after all. His father could have left everything to the mistress and then where would he be?
A very, very good point! I do wonder where this story came from – I am enjoying ‘travelling light’ at the moment, so it doesn’t reflect on my own grasping at material things, because I’m not in that mind-set these days (once, I was, when I was younger and more foolish). Hmm.. perhaps I have answered my own question! Thank you, Adam.
Yikes-I can relate to that anger. The fact that she’s the mistress and is so young-it’s like his dad is still care-taking her even after death.
Aha… but we don’t know the full story (including me!). It may have been a marriage he was pressured into, the wife may have been a bully…. who knows?!
You are so funny! Love this- how appropriate for the mistress to be younger than the son. CLEVER!
Thank you, Nan. I like to put in a little twist where I can.
I’m rooting for the mistress here. Nice idea.
Thank you, Sandra!
Ha, that’s a lovely twist. No wonder he’s angry.
Thank you, Patrick. The twists and turns of family relationships….
I liked the way you expressed the emotions, and the twist was delightful as well.
Thank you, Troy. I enjoy squeezing big stories into just a few words 🙂
You do it well!
Is he sure his anger does not stem from the fact that he finds his father’s mistress attractive? 🙂 Great write!
Oh it could be… jealousy! Thank you 🙂
Richly woven story in very few words!
Thank you, Erin!
Haha nice twist!Poor Iwata-san- so close yet so far!
I know – within touching distance! Thank you 🙂
This is just great.. a story that expands well beyond the 100 words… I love it
Thank you, Bjorn, I really appreciate your comments on this!
There’s so much in here, Freya, but I, too, think he should be counting his blessings and enjoying the view. As for wondering where the story came from, I think FF is living proof that imagination, not real life, is often afoot in the writing world. If not, we’re in deep doo-doo!!
Very true (about the deep doo-doo)!
I’m so glad you enjoyed this – it was a fun piece to write!
A lot of emotion and possibilities to this one. Makes the imagination run wild. Good one.
Thank you, Rochelle.
Oh my goodness, that made me laugh.
Irony of life 😉 Well done Freya!
So creative! And hilarious! (Is it wrong to laugh at this irony?) Great piece
Thank you, Eena! No, it’s not wrong! 😉