Here’s my submission to the dVerse Poetics prompt – this week, we are asked to write something inspired by one of the six beautiful artworks created by Catrin Welz-Stein showcased in the blog post.
I hope you enjoy my piece which has been inspired by the picture below – please do visit the linky link thing to read many more!
– Glimmer –
I long to fly away from here
escape the tendrils of my fear
that binds its barbs around my heart
and dogs my footsteps in the dark –
The dark that wraps itself around
and anchors my feet to the ground
leaden shoes and iron soul
a face that’s frozen, solid, cold –
A cold that cuts my life in two
that separates the me from you
there is no way to reach you now
I’ll never hear your voice aloud –
Your voice is just an echo, soft
whispers, laughs, holds me aloft
and draws my spirits high above
up to the clouds, with all your love –
Love, fly me away from here
banish dread, despair and fear
gently cradle my bruised heart
and light my way out from the dark.
46 thoughts on “Glimmer – dVerse Poetics”
smiles…if anyting, love can light that way out of the dark…i really like the cadence and rhyme scheme of this freya….nice turn from the grit to love…
Thank you, Brian. I’m really relishing this newly-found enjoyment of writing poetry, so I thought I would reflect that in an uplifting ending. For a change 🙂
That is a lovely write. We do wish to have some one in our lives to lift us and make us fly away from this darkness… I liked it.
Thank you, HA. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
Light my way out of the dark – very meaningful ending, I like it ~ Good to see you, smiles ~
Thank you! 🙂
Light my way, after the thistle has flown. Very whimsical.
Sometimes, I can be 🙂 Thank you for popping in!
The final two stanza really spoke out to me but, the last two lines were filled with hope..
Thank you, Truedessa. Yes, hope was the aim for the end – generally this light and hope out there 🙂
an emotional piece.. i much like how it develops from the darkness, the barb wire round the heart to a place of hope and freedom in the end there…
Thank you, Claudia. It’s good to leave a hopeful note for a change.
I enjoyed the “uplifting ending”!
Just for a change… 🙂
The end out of sadness and loss is so great.. love the form and rhytm in perfect tetrameter also… (smiles)
Thank you, Bjorn! I do enjoy this newly found love of writing, and not just reading, poetry.
I so enjoy both of it too — it’s so great…
Ah … subtle turn mid poem from “never” to hope. Love,
Subtle – that makes a nice change for me!
I like the idea of finding a way out of the dark. No matter how ‘dark’ a journey, I think eventually a way presents itself.
Yes, i think you’re right. A little while ago, I wouldn’t necessarily have been able to see that. I’m glad you enjoyed it, thank you.
So, fly so high away!!!! I cherish this last verse…. Its some cute lines
I’m pleased you enjoyed it! Yes, flying feels like a good idea 🙂
Very nice imagery! I like you manage to show how one is reaching for consolation.
Thank you, Lorri. I’m getting there.
Nice. There’s always hope if there’s love. Great written match to the picture.
Thank you, Myrna. Love is fundamental, I think.
Fear, separation, longing, love. You got it all in there. And in rhyme, too!
Thank you so much.
This was a very poignant bittersweet poem with a lovely sad lilt to it. The picture seems to go with rhyme! You handled it so very well. Thanks much. k.
Thank you so much.
Beautiful rhyming Freya! One yearns for a shining light to help one through in tight situations or even through life itself! Great take!
Thank you so much, Hank.
Enjoyed reading this again -this is simply phenomenal writing-such rich imagery ,Freya:-) I loved he lines”A cold that cuts my life in two ,that separates the me from you”-beautiful -hopeful end too:-)
Thank you – I am smiling so much at your lovely comments! 🙂
:-)You deserve them-you are a fantastic writer!
That has made my day!
A pleasure 🙂
It sounded like you were looking for love from someone else but the last paragraph opened the possibility that it’s love itself that brings the hope, and we can have that love for ourselves.
It can be taken either way – the beauty of creative writing, in whatever form. Having love for ourselves first and foremost is the most important of all, and yet seemingly the hardest to achieve. Thank you for popping in and commenting 🙂
So, are you anchored in lead, or drawn up to the clouds
Sorry, that comment does not necessarily say what I wanted it to say.
I read that you are (definitely) anchored in lead, and then I read that you are (definitely) drawn up into the clouds. I love the conflicting certainties. I have felt like that. I am not sure whether I have seen conflicting certainties expressed like this before. Beautiful.
Oh yes, totally certain and totally conflicting. It reflects where I am in my life at the moment – consistently inconsistent. Looking forward to either (a) being OK with that or (b) having more certainty, one way or the other (and hopefully drawn up into the clouds!).
Thank you so much!
Freya, this is beautiful, emotional, dark too. I hope you can fly away and i hope your heart be tenderly cared for.
Thank you, Debbie.